Sometimes the temperature goes up and sometimes goes right down. you could add a bit more information. good work. What is the time signature of the song Atin Cu Pung Singsing? Secondly, the accessories. The primary metaphor is the most basic of metaphors. Penultimate par5agraph the full stop at the end goes inside of the brackets. There is also a tall boy and an inbuilt wardrobe where I keep all of my shirts for school. On the left hand side is a bunk bed which has Jacksons (my little brother) bed at the bottom and my bed at the top with really messy covers. Above my bed, facing a window on the opposite side of the room, is a TV. Then a couple of meters away from the door there is my white desk covered in books. For example, the metaphor of an industrial factory is often used by biologists to communicate the complex process of a cell. A metaphor for a bedroom could be, " His bedroom is like a sauna since the air conditioner broke." Decorations fill the room with topics, happiness, colours and hobbies. But you a lot of descriptive words. Accessories is definitely one of my favorite things to see in my room. Running down the old wooden corridor a floorboard squeaked underneath my pounding feet. My walls are plain white and the carpet is a nice, soft contrasting dark colour. Like it get messy easily, not a lot of room to have fun and other thing. On the other side of the room is my chair with my blanket that fades from blue to white. I think your writing has really improved this year. Chris Trousdale Cause Of Death, You might say my bedroom is a mess but to be honest this is as tidy as you will get it. You spelt it as color (the American way). I think that it is still also good to keep using basic words. So, you can use this metaphor! Right as you walk through the door you will notice the feature wall, its brown background with white and dark green flowers on it. and at night when it's extremely cold I turn on my speedy heating friend my electric blanket and snuggle right down into my black and white duvet and my purple fluffy sheets. It might not seem like your average 13 year old bedroom because really this bedroom wasn't even for me, it was meant to be a spare room. It is a square shape and it is warm. In my bedroom standing in the doorway looking at it. I think you have done good with spelling and puncuation. I adore my paintings and the way that they match my theme of turquoise blue. The brown carpet matches the old wooden skirting. Expand on your punctuation so your not using the classics to much. My favourite part of my room sitting next to the window is my single bed. It's like a prison for books and random junk, and you never see it again until you decide to move your room around, which for me is usually every 3 years or so. Behind the white table theres a cupboard that I dont use instead I put my clothes in drawers in front of my bed. My clothes they are placed in piles beside the wall because my dad has not got any draws for the room. My bedroom isnt so great. This is the exact opposite of the earlier metaphor saying that your home is a workplace. Below the small window on the left is a nice, lush white desk with a lot of my belongings lying on top. I think that all of your Ideas were pretty detailed. The view outside my window is not the best. You have described it so accurately. I stroll into my room and the bright colours instantly pop out. Mabelles Bedroom Description I agree that it needs to be cleaner! I dont ever think of changing my carpet but if I was then I would just throw heaps of pillows down onto my floor, that would be very comfy. I walked through the door and stood still just looking into my bedroom. sleeps in my room. Personally I love my I am going to take you on a mental journey around my bedroom. Thirdly, the colour scheme. My bed. I need to describe a bedroom using metaphors and iam completely lost i cant think of anything so if you could help i would really appreciate it! Most of my books are stacked up into one of my cubby hole shelves. It's good that he loves his room and his own space. The only errors I could see was that you wrote picture instead of pictures. Overall I love my room to pieces because it belongs to me. It was a great story. Things that you need to work on is the punctuation and the length of your sentences. I liked the way you captured the masculine feel of the bedroom. My room also has a bit of a natural vibe as there are a far few plants around room. This final piece of text will be explaining the lighting. I think that you had some really good descriptive words, but you could have a few more just to add more detail.3+. 3. My room has an area where I keep drawing and pictures, an area for me to keep my collections. When I get up in the morning to go to school, or after a big sleep-in, my toes touch the soft dark carpet. If you walk into my room your senses would explode because of the smell, sight, sound, touch. I think your punctuation is good but some of your sentences are quiet long, you should of made them into 2 sentences instead of 1. Now you should have a pretty good idea of what my bedroom looks like. The trees blowing in the evening breeze shake leaves slowly onto the lake, delicately touching the water. You need to work on editing on your opening sentence. The rest of the walls are a nice white color and it goes with the furniture that is against it. It had a lot of descriptive words in it. My bedroom is facing west and is on the far side of the house. the final theme is football simply because we love football and there is football stuff everywhere that we play with in the house. People are sliding down the stairs, someone has a toy train set out, and someone else is playing with dolls on the front step. Your next step is to improve your grammar and punctuation. Then the colour of the furniture from a blue to a lighter colour. Very good vocabulary Sophie.I could imagine i was there. The colour and brightness are perfect in mostly every way possible. It is very plain with no rugs on it. It has all the colours and designs that I love. The editing for your description is great, haven't found any mistakes. I love my room because you can just sit and read and just play. I have a lot of space. Theirs the unbearable feeling of not being able to find anything and always having to resort to yesterday's old grungy smelly shirt that you chucked on the floor after you got home the day before, or just having to use week old socks by spraying deodorant on them so they don't smell bad because you seemed to have misplaced every other pair. Quite an old room perhaps. Your spelling needs some tweaking but overall I think you've done really well :). In my room I have lots of draws and places to put stuff but hardly use any of because most stuff is on the floor. By my bed there is a book shelf on top it has a lamp and inside it has a variety of books, by the corner there is another book shelf and it has a green lava lamp on top and more books below. The walls of my room are brown and the door is white the a gray handle. There are loads of different earrings dangling off of a metal sheet, which is shaped into a dog. My favorite place in the whole house, my space, my pride and joy, my happy place where I spend most of my time. You used good description and your story was interesting. How my room feels. On one side is a three section wardrobe with most of my craft supplies in it. must suck cock. I spend probably 12 hours a day on my bed so it needs to be nice and comfy luckily it is. The furniture looks comfortable and inviting, as though it is begging for someone to take a seat. I don't know how they got there. My bedroom (extended metaphor) My bedroom is a forest, heaps of clothes scattered on the floor is the undergroath. So, a swamp is a perfect place for them to live. The furniture in my room is quite tight. With blue sheets on it and a big pink and blue duvet. your bedroom is like the inside of your head (simile). The colours in my room are bright with my duvet which is mixed with bright light colour then there is my light blue curtains hanging by a Dark aqua chair. But then there's homework but you can still do it in your room on your bed or desk. I'd like to see your room Alex because of the rustic theme and colours. Writers usually describe the setting at the very start of a story. The cleanliness of my room is not so good. My bed is the most comfortable and cosy thing in my whole entire room. Now for all of the accessories in my room. The windows have a great view out them and have stripey grey and silver curtains. My bedroom is special to me because it's where I can go to get alone time and just relax it's pretty smelly but it's a cozy warm layout that is just for me. You could have added some more descriptive words in there. My room has lots of storage places to put clothes and stuff in and a big window to look out. It also depends of mine and Sams moods. I like it because it has all my precious stuff. Under my bed I throw just about everything down there like sport gear and clothes I can't be bothered putting away. My duvet is light blue with spots that are light pink, dark pink, turquoise and white.My bed is a king single and I find that it is a very convenient size. This is why my bedroom is the best place in the house. I think my bedroom is amazing but still has a bit of work to be done on it for it to be a masterpiece! Lots of vivid detail and descriptions Piper! So I would like to describe to you my own little world. Don't even get me started on my desk it's hardly a desk anymore it's just for storage.anything my mum tells me to pick up off the floor I most of the time just chuck it to the top of my desk or in the three sequenced in size draws that I can no longer hardly open because there full of unneeded nonsense already. You describe it very well, you could visualize yourself in your room. This answers first letter of which starts with S and can be found at the end of Y. It is made of pine so is a rather light golden brown in colour. The ideas are great and relevant to the topic. If you listen closely you can hear the constant purring of my kitten who is almost always a curled up fluff ball on my bed, you can also hear the random gurgling of the radiator and maybe the odd dragging of the paws on my midget staffy snuffling about for food. A lumpy duvet lies messily on the thick mattress that cradles me at night. in order to create the perfect metaphor to describe your home. I do everything in my room, im pretty much always in there. Your email address will not be published. The darkness at specific times, so as I said it can get dark fast, I have to use my lighting module just to make it look like its still daylight, it gets annoying sometimes, you just got home and you go in your room and you cant find the light (By the way my hallway light is a sensor light). Good description of your room Peta. MY BEDROOM I go in, close my eyes, breathe deep, and the world goes away. Personally would like a orange feature wall in my bedroom but when you're renting a house you have to have permission to do so. I raced around the corner and opened the door to my bedroom. I really love my bedroom, its completely designed by me and thats why I love it. Well structured paragraphs and a few funny jokes too. The floor in my room is medium sized. The Ideas are relevant but I would like to see more elaborated Ideas in the text. Sometimes a little bit of exaggeration creates the best metaphors. Feedback - It's good that you have the nouns and you have a bit of detail in them but add more. It's unique to me and cosy for my cat it's one of my favourite rooms in the house and has all the colours that I think fits me. Well described - good use of descriptive words. My bed has a wooden bed frame that comes up tall where my head is and not so tall where my feet are. There are plenty of possible metaphors for home. My black guitar leans up against my drawers and on top of my drawers there is an orange word that says Brave. On the other side of my bed, sits the divider that holds all of my well-loved books and DVDs. The bed is the main part of any bedroom because that's where everyone spends the most time. I think you edited the grammar well with making it make sense but there were a few spelling mistakes and no capitals for I The layout of the room has a facing direction pointing at the north east with side on single beds one near the huge closets and one across near the sliding windows for the sun to enter. I think Hannah's story had lots of descriptive words and had good punctuation and spelling. My bed is in the corner of my room because there is no other space for it to go. I would really like to move things around,like move my desk away from my bed (so I don't always knock my head on the corner), and move everything against the wall so I can do wacky things with mo.re space in the centre of my room, although I would have to actually clean it once in awhile. It may be the view of the mountain you see out my window or maybe the blue colour scheme or maybe even all the photographs on my crisp white walls. My bedroom is located at the back of my house halfway down the hall. I would give you a rubric 5. It's not really the best looking room because it's really messy and has light pink wallpaper. Sences in my bedroom are a fresh air smell, because the window is usually open in my room. My duchess is across from my bed flat against the left hand wall. Megan your vocab was very good with describing things. Harriets Bedroom Then I set up a place to do stuff I love to do such as playing on my ipod, read books, play with lego, do trick shots and the funnest thing is well sleep. The walls are boring light brown planks of wood. I liked some of the words you used like; zooming, convenient and belongings. The theme of my bedroom is simply my favourite things. There are multi-coloured paper butterflies scattered all over the pale purple walls, swarming in corners and perching on the edges of family photographs. It has a flexible neck which can turn about 160 degrees, as well as being able to slightly tilt up and down. People say their home The pattern is bad, It is a circle and 2 squiggly lines that run beside it and keep doing the same thing until it reaches the roof. At the foot of my bed there is a built in wardrobe with lots of clothes and at the foot of my sisters bed theres the entrance to the room and the door to the en suite. Your description is really good. My duvet has many colours and matches everything in my room, including my bright pink beanbag. Now my layout I don't really like my layout but it's ok I guess but it can be better the reason I don't like it is my bed is too far away from my tv. Every morning I need to make sure my bed is neat and tidy. Thanks for dropping by. I think that your ideas are great, they describe your room well. Dont sniff to much or else you will smell the dirty clothes on the floor. Brookes Bedroom Description THOMASS BEDROOM You could add more information on the accessories in your room. My room is not the most spectacular, but it is the one place that I can call my own. My pillows and duvet are very colourful but you can hardly ever see what they look like because I almost never make my bed so unless someone else does all the duvets and pillows have been thrown on the floor or are inside out. There are green curtains in my room that catch your eyes. 3, Great description Hayden, you forgot to mention the constant piles of washing in it! So now you know about my room, I hope you can visualize it and my topics were the furniture, accessories, colors and the layout. Virgo Descendant: Personality Traits and Compatibility, Taurus Descendant: Personality Traits and Compatibility, Scorpio Descendant: Personality Traits and Compatibility. The simplest way to make a metaphor is to use this pattern: First noun + to be verb + a/an + second noun She is an angel. There are lots of accessories in the room. 3+. I also have a variety of colourful possessions around the room. Continue useing very good punctuation and spelling. The lamp rests on a stack of six books that are all ever so slightly faded because of the direct sunlight that streams in all day long through the window. The colouring is a dark grey frame with translucent drawers. My bedroom isn't that big so storage isn't easy for all of the clutter I have. Try next time to make some of your objects more descriptive and not just the colours. The reason why my room is my room is because the wallpaper, the wallpaper is nicely placed in cool spots. I mostly use this as a storage place but I also like to sometimes use it for doing my homework on, reading or other things like that. Most times I just laugh because sometimes he is just plain old stupid. Georges Bedroom The relaxation of leaping onto it at the end of the day is basically the same as reading a extremely tired baby a lullaby. David Silverman Simpsons Net Worth, I don't think you've left out a single thing about your room :), This sounds like the room I have been in there is lots of detail.The ending paragraph is great to end the description, This sounds very descriptive. Every room needs furniture to make it yours and in my room the most important piece of furniture is my bed. The sight can be sometimes messy, with my clothes everywhere. The fresh air circulates the room which gives me a sense of new and relaxation. My room is VERY messy. They might also have filing cabinets and stacks of work-related folders lying around. Very well written. You were very descriptive when it came to what you liked about your room and what you didn't like. But all of this is because the entire house is new, in fact it's not even finished!, although with all these bonuses I don't go into my bedroom that often. My king single bed is positioned against the wall with the big square window and next to that is a white bedside table filled with junk that hasnt been used in years! By Bridget Smith. It has a dark theme and it has black sheets and gray covers. I liked how your story told a true picture of how your room is. Because if you dont and try wade through all the clothes spread out and risk breaking your leg or ankle on toy cars or getting bits of lego stuck between your toes. My room is very minimalistic because of the black and white design. (Her eyes were beautiful.) It is strewn with piles of clothes and virtually impossible to walk through. SHADYNS BEDROOM Good work a nice peace of writing. Kaias Bedroom I don't care what people think about it because its my own space. Most objects in my room have the same color either black, grey or white. On the right hand side as you walk in there is an orange feature wall with a small white window towards the top. I strolled down the hallway to my room on the right. September 2014. There are so many aspects of my bed I love but my favorite one would have to how comfortable it is. It also has jumps for my motorbike but you cant really see them because they are covered over with grass since I dont go on them much anymore. make sure it's extra creamy!!! LEARNING WITH MRS STAPLES@ MT HUTT COLLEGE, METHVEN. I dont like vacuuming so I try to get out of it as much as I can. The layout of my room is made so everything can fit. It is my favourite part of my house because I can do what I like in there, and yet not get disturbed. Whichever it is, Im going to take you on a virtual tour of my bedroom. They are stacked up quite messily. Great detail in your paragraphs Jessie. My room is big and there is lots of space to do fun activities like board games and flips. Next time you could have more ideas because the paragraphs were a little short. 10 metaphors to describe a place. Reubens bedroom description As the sun beamed into my bedroom, one of my signs began to glisten and reflect the light that was coming through the window. it can be a beach theme a sky theme or whatever I can come up with. I have a built in wardrobe that has shelves in it where I can store my belongings. Then straight ahead you will see my drawers with three pukeko statues and some other items. Another metaphor that could be used is, " The bedroom is so messy, it looks like a war zone." 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